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Just been going over Colonisation again, and your review sprung to mind. You said the first 2-3 chapters bored you nearly to abandoning it; what three (or so) things would you suggest changing? Or what do you feel needs the most attention there? Cheers! :-) Hope you don't mind the brain picking :-P

richardstheone’s Profile PhotoRichard Holliday
This is a very old question and I have not reread recently but, it was mainly character interactions.
I found the teenage crush with the secretary to be pointless though it later turned out to be the sister of a "villain" I feel it might have been better to introduce him Leo as a direct character perhaps in the sense of a fellow pupil also going for membership in the academy.
I fear without rereading and giving a blow by blow analysis I will struggle to really answer this question
I think to sum it up; it was slow and didn't really add to the later story which was far better...
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