ashley can i have your help on something? can you just read my synopsis and see if it's any good, or if it's rubbish? it's okay if you don't want to, i'll just post the link here. http://i.imgur.com/jbbquAi.jpg
sure! (:
OMG DUDE THIS IS BRILLIANT.
THERE'S A REASON WHY YOU ARE AUTHOR OF THE WEEK HOLY CRAP.
I got so sad there was no more to read.
BOY SAVE BITTER PLS
I ship them so hard what even xD
this was beautiful. I loved the feeling of it <3 you brought in so much freaking emotion! I LOVE THIS SO MUCH I CAN'T EVEN HOLY CRAP I JUST UGH I AM HONORED THAT YOU ASKED ME TO READ IT.
asdfghjkl; the sentence "it's called the final experiment for a reason." made me shiver. freaking feels.
___
I did find a couple mistakes, but like there weren't many! this was just. ugh. ugughugughughghghg<3333
on the first sentence you may want to change "name her that name" to "give her that name" or something o: different word usage so that it flows better c:
and after the word "name" maybe change the comma to a semi-colon? o: that's up to you though :3
on the sentence "And she's never felt more helpless when..." maybe it should be "helpless then when..." c: if you didn't mean for it to be that way then no need to fix it! :3
THANK YOU SHIRLEY FOR HAVING ME READ THIS.
I WILL FOREVER FANGIRL OVER IT
BITTER<3 BOY <3
SAVE HER PLS
OMG DUDE THIS IS BRILLIANT.
THERE'S A REASON WHY YOU ARE AUTHOR OF THE WEEK HOLY CRAP.
I got so sad there was no more to read.
BOY SAVE BITTER PLS
I ship them so hard what even xD
this was beautiful. I loved the feeling of it <3 you brought in so much freaking emotion! I LOVE THIS SO MUCH I CAN'T EVEN HOLY CRAP I JUST UGH I AM HONORED THAT YOU ASKED ME TO READ IT.
asdfghjkl; the sentence "it's called the final experiment for a reason." made me shiver. freaking feels.
___
I did find a couple mistakes, but like there weren't many! this was just. ugh. ugughugughughghghg<3333
on the first sentence you may want to change "name her that name" to "give her that name" or something o: different word usage so that it flows better c:
and after the word "name" maybe change the comma to a semi-colon? o: that's up to you though :3
on the sentence "And she's never felt more helpless when..." maybe it should be "helpless then when..." c: if you didn't mean for it to be that way then no need to fix it! :3
THANK YOU SHIRLEY FOR HAVING ME READ THIS.
I WILL FOREVER FANGIRL OVER IT
BITTER<3 BOY <3
SAVE HER PLS
